对于想出国留学的同学们，可能会选择去考雅思，那同学们现在的水平怎么样呢？今天就来看一篇6分雅思作文以及考官点评。下面就和出国留学网一起来看看吧！Thegraphshowspercentagesofcinemaattendanceatleas...
对于想出国留学的同学们，可能会选择去考雅思，那同学们现在的水平怎么样呢？今天就来看一篇6分雅思作文以及考官点评。下面就和出国留学网一起来看看吧！
ThegraphshowspercentagesofcinemaattendanceatleastonceayearinAustraliabetween1990to2010withprojectionsforthefuture.Thegraphisdescribedby4groupsofdifferentageswhichare14to24，25to34，35to49andover50yearolds.
Theyoungestagegrouppeoplehavebeengoingtocinemamorethananyotheragegroupsandthepercentagehasbeenkeepingveryhighatapproximately90%since1990.Itispredictedtokeepthehighandtoincreasemorefrom2006.
Themiddleagegroupspeoplehaveenjoyedgoingcinemabetween60%to80%.Thepercentageofage25to34grouphasbeenhigherthantheoneofage35to49groupbutfrom2006thepercentageof25to34yearoldspeoplewilldecreasewhiletheoneof35to49yearoldspeoplewillincreaseandgethigherthantheotherone.
Theoldestpeopleseemtogocinemalessthantheothergroupsbutthepercentageoftheattendancehasslightlygoingupby15%from40%to55%between1990to2004anditwillkeepincreasingto60%by2010.
【考官评语】
Band6
Thisresponseaddressestherequirementsofthetaskandselectsrelevantmaterialtodescribe.Keyfeaturesandanoverviewarepresented，althoughclearerhighlighting，moresupportandamorecomprehensiveoverviewwouldbeneededtoreachahigherband.Informationiswell-organisedandthereisaclearoverallprogressionintheresponse.Thereissomeeffectiveuseofcohesivedevices，butonlylimiteduseofreferenceandsubstitution.Therangeofvocabularyisnotwide，butitisadequateforthetask.Controlofwordformandspellingisconsistentlygood，althoughtherearesomeclumsynounphrasesthatindicatelimitedflexibility.Thecandidateattemptstouseamixofsimpleandcomplexsentences，butcontrolisvariableandgrammaticalerrorsoromissionsarequiteintrusiveattimes.Figuresarepoorlyintegratedintosentencesandindicateevidentlimitations.
